Sample Paper II

At first glance, the yellow wallpaper seems to be nothing more than a psychotic narrator explaining how she becomes deranged. However, once the reader begins to familiarize themselves with the story, they begin to see the true symbolism and horror that lies latent beneath the superficial storyline. The narrator is the wife of a doctor who decides of his own accord that his wife is in need of the ‘rest cure’ to help her cope through(?) her mental breakdown. Tragically, the very thing that the husband does with good intentions is the exact thing that triggers the narrator’s insanity.

From my point of view(readings), (I felt that it was uncanny how) the narration was(had) distorted so much(views) that (made) abnormal situations seem almost ordinary. (and) The unreliable narrator leads(influenced the) a reader to keep a critical distance from(not just complacently accept)the protagonist’s point of view. (but to critically analyze and question what is happening within the story.) The work of fiction is riddled with ironic prose(phrases?) and symbolisms that are overtly(really?) against the ‘rest cure’ that was forced upon both the author and the narrator.

The narrator’s oppression is apparent in the way she thinks and writes. Such patriarchal control can be observed in one outstanding example when the narrator stops mid-thought(?) to quote her husband and his disapproval of her idea.	This may not seem like much but it portrays just how much even the narrator has internalized themindset of the male dominated society.(unclear, needs a lot of explanation) Another point(of criticism) was the way the ‘rest-cure’ was diagnosed: without any consent on the part of the women.(the consent is not usually required when the doctor “diagnoses” or gives a prescription to a patient)  It was harsh enough that the women were forced to be subservient to men but they were also infantilized(?); their opinions were decimated even in matters that directly concerned them.

Also something I noticed was that the book contained a slew of ironies that fleshed out the story.(?) Particularly(Other than verbal irony), the dramatic irony plays(ed) a large part in separating the reader and the narrator.(therefore allowing the reader to simultaneously relate with the narrator whilst being able to objectively comprehend the situation.) Such was the case when the woman does not consciously realize that the stain on her clothes and the long smooch around the wall is a result of her crawling around the room rubbing against the yellow wallpaper. Another example( of irony) would be when the narrator moves into the room to find(and observes) that many(the) bars for children are installed in her room.( on the windows and barred furniture is for children.) The readers know better and will mostly draw the other plausible conclusion; that the room was previously used for mentally ill patients.

The other(An additional) interesting fact I noticed(extrapolated) was that the woman may indeed be suffering from(dealing with) postpartum depression. This was important for me to understand exactly why the husband had decided that the protagonist had been in need of ‘rest treatment’ in the first place. Constant references to a baby is brought up and I guess(from what we can guess),‘Mary’ is taking care of the baby while the narrator is treated( for her supposed ailment). Additionallyitisplausiblethatthewomanbeing(?) non-domestic and intelligent also factored into(?) her receiving treatment because at the time such qualities were unappreciated in a woman.(?)

Overall, reading the “The Yellow Wallpaper” was an intriguing experience because despite the seemingly unorganized pointless(?) plot, there are a myriad of symbolisms and hidden messages to interpret that thereadingexperiencegainsmomentum.(?) Thus the more(times) one reads the book, the more mesmerizing the short story becomes. The criticisms that this short story strives to address(is trying make?), women’s rights, is still an uphill battle today. Perhaps Charlotte Perkins Gilman had meant for the short story to raise awareness about woman’s right,togivethenanidentity.(?) Through this literary work, people are open to an understanding of how established norms in a society donot always equate to what is right in the world.(?)

영어실력이 정말 애매하다. 보통 학생들보다 어휘나 전반적인 구사력이 나은 듯하나, 정작 뜯어보면 정확한 문장이 별로 없다. 좀 더 겸손하게, 정확한 어휘와 정확한 문법을 갖춘 문장을 써야 한다.

Text이해도 좀 더 정확하게, 섬세하게 할 수 있도록 해야 한다. 3.5점